Your memoir should take the reader to those moments in time.
How can you do that if you don't give us details!
Try using the five senses to bring the memory back to the present!
What sounds, smells, and other senses can you tell us about?
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sound
i could hear people (kids asking why they havn't been on the team.
see
i could see the happy faces on the on the kids and sad faces on the kids that didn't get to be chosen
hear.
secreams
everyone thanking MR. Hallick for being on the team
taste
i taste water forming in my mouth beacuse i am so speechless
Come on everyone. What a great opportunity to join blogging fun if you haven't already done so. This is a great topic. Details, details, details, you've done this time and time again and I know you can do it. Who knows, maybe Mr. Byrd will accept some of your blogs as extra credit. You don't have to write an entire chapter or book, but just write a little something. I encourage you, I urge you. If I can do it, so can you. I have learned so much from so many of you already, it's practically a miracle that I'm using the laptop. I'll be looking to hear from you soon.
Gurpreet - so far you were the first and only student. Thanks! It is only beneficial to you for your writing. Your memoir will be something you can keep forever and remember how great you were, even in sixth grade! Keep up the good work!
i could hear one person talking at a time in the room with the beaming light in everyones face(hear and see). i still taste the penut butter and jelly from the school lunch(taste). as i sit on top of the sofa i can feel the soft texture of the silky velvet i sit upon(feel). as i give her a handshake i feel a new freindship has began and i am apart of this freindship that i'll never regret(touch).~mr.byrd u are right. when using the 5 senses in writing it makes it more interesting.~
from christine s.
Once I went to the park with my mother and her friend. I had a joyous time there and I enjoyed playing with my long time friend Micheal
The trip to the park was very long because we had to take the gray metallic train and the ride was very long and boring. I had to wait without any entertainment what so ever. Then we finally got out of the cold dark train station.
When I saw the bright, orange, luminescent sunlight I felt the warmth of the outdoors. We walked around until we saw Macy's but we realized that we had gotten off the train at the wrong stop when my mother saw the green sign hanging there on the pole. So my mother and herb friend decided to just go to the park when they saw a park filled with children of all ages.
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