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95 comments:
well i am writing a memoir of me bein gin the volleyball teanm
so iif a nybody has any firstsentences pleses help me
This is one lead that i thought of for the story when my uncle died
On one deviantly, bright Saturday morning, my father's black, and silver slide phone rang with the most precise ringtone.When I realized it was from my aunt in Florida. She stated: "Paul, Paul, Paul put your dad on the phone." I overheard her saying that my uncle had passed away due to 7 heart attacks and he was in the hospital.
"Ring Ring" tephone rang. My mom picked up the phone. I tried to ask her who it was but he kept on ignoring me!
Dear Diary,
OMG!!! My family is so embarassing, but a while ago I went to a picnic with them. "Oh my god!"I cried, "I am going to be in total embarrassment!" I did not want to be alone woth my parents!
well i am writing a memoir of me being in the volleyball team in fifth grade.
i am stuck so if anybody has any first sentences lease help me!!!!!!
Gurpreet heres one for you,
"yes!!!"I screamed. We had just won the volleball match against....
what school?
So my story is called, "The Hospital."
It is about my mm and was a painful time for my family and I.
My lead is: "I didn't know if my mom was going to come home or not." Mr. Byrd told me it would make or sound like more of a story.
My ending is: "But throughout this whole experience I learned that the most important thing in life is FAMILY!
welll no i want to start as me finding out that i made the talent show
or something like tiday was a great day,,
i was coming back from schooolll..........
Can you give me a good one?
oR IS MINE GOOD ENOUGH?
i HATE my memori
IT IS SO BORING It never happened! I think???
hey Jap and gurpreet whats up..
This is my lead:
Living with shopping crazed aunt and wy weird cousins really change you! It might sound bad, but after living with them from one year old to six years old you get really used to it and start liking them. Their actions have made me who I am today and I have many memories about my five year life with them!
"Volleyball has changed me throughout my years at P.S.161Q."
HOW ABOUT THIS GURPREET?
Japneet------ that is such a good "first sentence" ONG LIKE TOTALLY
leslie urs is prety gud
jap i like what you wrote...
gurpreet you should bein with something going on...just like "yea i am in the volleyball team" or something like that
GURPREET YOU LIKE IT OR TRY THIS ONE.
"This was my most favorite thing to do until the incident."
!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Hey gurpreet is your memory about the talet show or the volleyball team
well for the one i gav u , u can go to back to time like "yes!" blah blah blah Ok rewind..............................
blah blah blh I made it into the volleyball team! Yes!
OMG!!! Justlike 4th grade I got into the talent show!
These are for u gurpreet!
sorry i was crazy then
TRY AND MAKE YOUR STORY INTO MEMORIES OF HAPPY TIMES WITH VOLLEYBALL MIXED WITH HURTFUL TIMES WITH VOLLEYBALL. I CAN PICTURE IT NOW. IT WILL BE A GOOD STORY!!!!!!!!!!!!! PLEASE TRY IT!!!!
waz up piti didi oh sry kirty!
hey jap what is your stor about?
piti didi ha ha ha nice name! pardeep
nice well japoneet what are you doing for your memoir hey wat about oyu parddeeep
im fine....and i dont mind if you call me piti didi..i like it know hahaaahhaa
ummmm it's about a fake story of me and my family going somewhere! stupid right?
This is my lead to my memior when I got lost in
"Toys 'R' Us"
Sometimes life doesn't turn out the way you expect it and sometimes when it doesn't turn out the way you want it could be the best day of your life or it could even make you a better person. I remember when I got lost in "Toys 'R' Us" when I was 6
Mr. Byrd i do have a really good lead:
" Sandip! please get up and do your prayers right after you take a shower and brush your teeth," my mother yelled at me while i was fast asleep on the bed snoring almost like my father. i pretended not to be there.
GURPREET YOU LIKE THE SENTENCE IDES I GAVE YOU?
happy brithday!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!everyone join the party!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
hey nice pic sanju
its abot my cousin ....u kno
one sunny hot day me and my friend went to the circus. i played a lot with the clown and then i stopped and i dident want to do anything but go home.
i am not comin to afterschool! bye
!
thats cuut esandip very cute
yea nice car...soo what you doing sandip.....
“Are we there yet?” I asked the driver who was my uncle that came over from California for a week. Because of him, we had our first family lengthy trip to Buffalo, New York. The word we includes my loving parents, my two younger siblings, my active grandma, two pairs of aunt and uncles that crack jokes every second, my cute cousin and finally, but not the least, me!
We were driving in a white van that provided eleven seats for the passengers to sit in. We switched seats of drivers and other people that were present in the car. The eleven kids and adults in the car were on our way to Niagara Falls and since it was our first time going there, we used a navigation to supply the directions for us. We had been driving this way and that on numerous roads and through tons of places. So far, we had driven for approximately eight hours. I was wishing to get there soon because I didn’t feel like being squashed in the car for any longer.
“We are almost their, Kiran,” answered my uncle that was controlling the car after taking a quick glance at the navigation. It was 9: 34 p.m. and the arriving time on the navigation was 9:37 p.m. this meant that we were pretty close. We weren’t going to Niagara Falls right now, we were going to stay at a hotel called “Holiday Inn”.
My uncle had booked two rooms. One room was for my family and the other one belonged to the two pairs of uncles and aunts and my cousin. Each room had one small bathroom that contained everything we needed. There were also two king size beds with a reddish cover on top and there was even a small regular TV to watch cartoons or news on. I was amazed to see how clean and organized it was because I had never been in a motel before. It was my first time to do many things during this journey. I was so delighted that he had planned this for us due to the fact that i loved to visit places i hadn't before.
Is that better???
sandip nice car but look at my car it is better and my cars color is rich green............
Was it good this time Mr. Byrd??
The ending of my story is So when my uncle died we were all sad and then i realized that i was very emotional then but through that life experience i became a little more sensitive toward my feelings and others
whatz up every body? How you guys are doing? Any one like to blog to each other? Mr. Byrd i am writing my memoir about my mother she always used to teach me really good manner and a really good how to respect the elders when i was a little kid.
I have many leads for my memorie but I have only one that I think is kind of good. So far I have came up with two sentence. Here I go..
"When you lose a friend it is like losing half of your past. I will always have memories but it would never be the same."
That is all i got so far.
It was the fastest 5 seconds, I caught them all in a flash that's the beginning to my story just getting started
whats up every body? how you doin?any ony likes school? how old are you?
where are you from?
what food you like?
do you like to bully?
Mr. Byrd is a really nice teacher and he is always talking about school work and he also is so cool!
Do you want to be my friend?
Well i am writing about a meomery of me begining a new basketball team can you help me start my meomery?
lovepreet, your car is really nice and i like green colored cars.
I enjoyed reading your leads and endings. Keep writing. Some leads are funny and others are full of suspense. This is a fun activity and we are still learning. If you keep writing, ladies and gentlemen, I'll keep reading. Have a great weekend. Don't forget you can use podcast for your leads and endings. wow that should be very interesting.
I enjoyed reading your leads and endings. Keep writing. Some leads are funny and others are full of suspense. This is a fun activity and we are still learning. If you keep writing, ladies and gentlemen, I'll keep reading. Have a great weekend. Don't forget you can use podcast for your leads and endings. wow that should be very interesting.
hi poelz what are you guys writing about?
Hey Gyrpreet whats up..........jap..gurpreet
Lead:
Waaaaaaaa! I yelled asmy bikeflew down the steep hill.
End:
So I had to tell my mom the truth and I never lied again.
i already told you..i am writing about my fav cousin..i think love is writing 5the same...oh well....soooo
Well for my story I am doing it on a visit to my uncles house. Wow Lovepreet really good questions. What dose that have to do with leads and endings. Duhh.
nothing muvh
what are you writingabout raman
what are you writing about japneet
what are you writing about Pardeep
Wow guys we are at the same table and you guys are talking
oh my bad
what about you jap and rama?
Waz up Gurpreet! What ur memoir on? Mines is on how I got lost at the train station, it happened yesterday. Well I didn't get lost their but my mom and my cousin didn't get off the train I did It wasn't scary i noticed that i waz brave
yuo hareshg ohh soo what is ypou rs tory about
haresh is a little midjet sryharesh!
Didn't I say it before look at my previous comments.
lead:
i rode down the hill with all of my speed. I thought I was going to fall but i didn't.
End:
I finally told my mom the truth and i never lied in my life agian except sometimes.
I'm writing when the time i was climbing a tree and i fell backwards and my head started to bleed.
What about you Gurpreet.
In writing we are starting to write a memoir.
I was always alone. I had no brothers or sisters. I was the center of my parents attention. Well, to tell you the truth i liked it being loved and cared for 24/7. That is until..... a newborn was going to come along!!
my lead....
"Ring ring" the phone rang.my mother picked up the phone. I was sitting right next to her on the wooden chair.I tried to find out who's phone it was but my mom kept on ignoring me.
is hat better...japneet
What japneet????
oh well i don't thiunk you should write aOUYT THAT beacuse that just happened yesterday
that just haopened to you
nice lead
but what is your ending sentence?
can anyone help me with mine ?
Pardeep is that a pic of The Golden tempele.
gurpreet it was a memory todaty wasn't it?
what did you learn from that jap..and gurpreet what is yr topic about....
i am writing about how when imade it to the volleyball team and how that made me agressive
ilearned that i was brave and that i can go to different places alone
the main idea for my story is that i had fell and lied tomy mom, and at the end i figure out i have a huge swollen bump on my head and i had to tell the truth.
I learned that never to lie because it could cause you probkems in the future.
butttttt
you hhave yo write how it changed you
A good ending sentence for ur volleyball story is:
"No matter what. I will always love volleyball!"
HOW ABOUT THAT GURPREET AND DID YOU LIKE THE LEADS I GAVE YOU?
Nice! i wish i was in the voleyball team.
Thanks haresh..the golden temle is very important to me...thats why i have that pic.....
Gurpreet...i am going to write what i learned from that memory in the last paragraph////////
yea i wasn't brave before i was always scared, but now i am not.
Even though i was riding with totla strangers
but i do not think that is a great memoir no affends \
it has to make scence
that is weird no affends
pcThe story that i am am doing changed or learned me that no matter what, my family are the most important things to me!
Ohh I forget this is my first sentence.
We came off the plane looking for my Uncle. We saw him in sight and he took us to the car to go to his home.
hello ANYONE speak to me plz LOL JK!!!!!
butt it doesn't soun d intresting no afends
ramandeepdont wry u probably didn't make it in the volleyball team, if you get left back you can try next year!
hahahaghahahahaha
ana banana so what are you writing about
I learned that people care in diffrent ways.
YOU NEED AN EXCITING LEAD SENTENCE!!! NOT A PERSONALNARRATIVE.. THINK OF A MEMOIR!!!!!! OR MEMOIR LEAD AND ENDING KK?
P.S.THX GURPREET! AND I DONT NKWO WHAT FOR SO DONT ASK ME!
YOU NEED AN EXCITING LEAD SENTENCE!!! NOT A PERSONALNARRATIVE.. THINK OF A MEMOIR!!!!!! OR MEMOIR LEAD AND ENDING KK?
P.S.THX GURPREET! AND I DONT NKWO WHAT FOR SO DONT ASK ME!
Good job - I love a good lead!
Your ideas are great! Your memories are so special and touching! I can't wait to read your memoirs!
i would rite something but i do not feel umm comfortable exposing my personal writing on the internet so umm, sorry but,
I AGREE WITH GURPREET. U DO NEED A VERY EXCITING SENTENCE. I LIKE TO START WITH DIOLOGUE.
now instead of starting out in the car, i am going to start out when i wake up in the hotel the next morning and take the story from there.
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