Keep it up!
Remember, metaphors compare two things. Try this format:
Now fill in the blanks! Here's an example:
Joy is a
sleek surfboard
riding on white-capped waves,
balancing beautifully between the ocean floor and sky
See what I mean? I could now keep going with my metaphor, or I could find new ones for joy. Try it out!
**Did you notice the alliteration?
http://www.merriam-webster.com/dictionary/alliteration
157 comments:
Love is a joyful person sailing all the way into your heart.
*What do you think?
Nice now I got an idea.
thanks haresh... i was thinking really hard to make one up....
I think I got it
I am as alone as the first star in the sky.
nice but a little boring no offense...
try again i am thinking of a new poem..
don`t worry about anastasia haresh you`r metaphor is grate!!!
no sarita not that great... you know how i like to speak my mind...duh!!!!!!1
I'm thinking
I am alone in the desert
in the afternoon
with rocks sinking into the sand
and a mirage lage
in the distance of your feet
now that great... i am still thinking ... lol
lol Mine is great
haresh it is grate but stop bragging!!!lol
Music is a blooming sound entering your soul and mind...
*Again...what do you think?
8Yea Haresh lolc dude
I'm not bragging. Nice poem. I was complenting my self.
kk thats cool
Well thanks again.
hm-mmmm you welcome
u r funny haresh. lol
sarita why don't you put a poem on the new topic like we did.
yea it's great and fun to do....try it
Hey I got an idea. Never mind I fogot. I had aq great poem.
yea i know that feeling lol
hey Everyone I'ts me!!!
Well I think she is gone.
whats up tasha.... it is finally good to have somebody else than Haresh or Sarita or Me lol..
whats up tasha.... it is finally good to have somebody else than Haresh or Sarita or Me lol..
amm.. here is a poem that i already know but i cahnged some lines to it
Roses are red,
Vilets are blue,
A monkey like you,
Should be in the zoo.
Hi Natasha
lol!!!
good one Sarita
never mind
very funny sarita...whats up everyone
hey Heresh
Someone make a new one up or I will again
HEY I GOT ONE:
Roses are blue,
Violets are RED,
your so annoying,
so get back to bed!
You heard what I said!
MMMHHMM...
that's right TED!!
I got one
The sun is hot and its pulse is strong
Can't think of anyting to continue
here is another metaphor i made....
sadness is a grumpy person going into a dark tunnel.
LIKE IT!!!
who's Ted?
very funny natahsa i looveee it...you like my metaphor this is my third one...
nice one Natasha lol
moms hand is like the kiss of the moon light
we have been talking a long time....believe me!!!!
THANKS YOU GUYS!!!!
awww natasha i love that one...
I love yours Anistasia yours too heresh!!
brb
thanks natasha....
Thanks
back!!!
anyone here?
k i am soo bored.... but i am doing
the math hw ...
i am here!
what is reading hw?
idk still
floors are abused everyday by the footsteps of each human being! It feels hurt and ashamed as a kid in pre-school having a time out!
like that one?
Wait I got another one
The moon has a face like the clock in the hall. She shines and theives on the garden wall.
I know the reading homework!!!
yea -_-
nice poem natasha but what the reading hw?
-Sarita and Anistasia-
the reading hw is...:
write details from the book "The Giver" what does the following statement mean?
Thankyou for your childhood.
-Natasha
THAT"S DUE TOMORROW!!!!!
but the one we got on our mailbox is due on FRIDAY!!!!
ohhhhh....thank you sooooo mcuh Natasha
ps...you keep spelling my name wrong but that dont matter..i was just saying...
......
Thank you Natasha very much.
your welcome and sorry! Now I know it's...ANASTASIA!
u r the best
what
lol thx once again...ur the best!!!!!!!
I got one:
The kiss of loved one is like touching a star in the sky
-Natasha
A NATASHA ORIGINAL
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lol i love that one....ur good at this...
nice
And don't worry guys!
what are freinds for?
yea i know and ur a great one...
My turn
Patiently I wait alone and I wonder,
The darkness that surrounds me
what does it mean though?
Don't have a clue I made it up
ok that' too weird lol...nice try though
So you have a better one?
.?..?...?....?.....
tought so
omg i wasnt even paying attention...
dear anstasia,
I think it rocks! ITS charasmatice like me, im just kidding. I think its kind of cute it has meaning.
from,
Christine Sewnarine=}
Anastasia – Great job! You got it!
Haresh – Good simile! My turn
Patiently I wait alone and I wonder,
The darkness that surrounds me – good!
Natasha – Mom’s hand is like the kiss of the moon light – great!
The kiss of a loved one is like touching a star in the sky – great!
How about a metaphor, Natasha?
sadness is a black hole of despair sucking in in all of the human's mind and all emotions aswell
nice posts haresh i like your thinking:)
Anger is a flaming ball of destruction hurling at the mind ingulfing all of the person'semotions
Love is a sensitive emotion that blinds the opposite gender rendering helpless to all of the other gender's actions
Anger is a flaming ball of destruction hurling at the mind ingulfing all of the person's emotions
sorry about the mistake from b4
Hey mr.byrd i like this website it is very interestin and fun to chat with classmates
Good metaphor Paul!
space is an imge of millions of galaxies just floating around for many years just waiting for someone to discover it
happiness is a bright red balloon flying away in the wind
chrisine r said....
sadness is a wet teardrop falling on a rose
Love is a heart beating in your body
d you like it?=)=(
frome christine sewnarine-.-
love is a tiny blue doll dancing on her shelf
Sadness is a pool of tears dripping onto the Earth.
a tear is a heartful emotion, flowing through a river
Nice poem steven
thanks, say hi to mr.byrd from me,are you alll blogging now
anger is a hot bowl of fire swirling in your head.
anger is a hot ring of fire flaming in your head.
Sadness
Sadness is a pool of wet tears that are dripping onto the clear green Earth. Sadness could spread trough out everywhere. It is one of the worst emotions. No matter what every body gets sad once in a while. Sadness is a pool of wet tears that are dripping down onto the cold clear green Earth.
Metaphor
Money isn`t everything
Money doesn`t mean you use people
Money doesn`t mean you pay for things
Money doesn`t get you to heaven
Money doesn`t get you to believe
christine r said....
Sandeep, what are you talking about. money is like one of the top five things in life. by the time we are 15, it will be able to buy everything!!!!!!
I don't know what to say! ALL of your metaphors are awesome. The poems by Tareeq and Sandip are genius! I am blown away everyone. Keep it up!
christine r said....
ROCK ON MR.BYRD!!!!!!
CHRISTINE S-
ANGER IS BALLS OF FLAME ROARING IN YOUR MIND
Here is one of my metaphor poems...
Clumsy is a jittery
Junebug jumping
Into your feet
It makes you shake ~ and ~
Fall like a EARTHQUAKE does...
it tangles, twisting you feet
Clumsy is a zany ball
Bouncing towards you body...
So...Watch out!!!
Real cute, Anastasia - good work!
what do you think....critisize but critisize good....Another one of my favorite word is critisize lol...
Thank Mr.Byrd it took me a long
time to write that one poem....
Hmm.. take out the word does after "earthquake." That will put some rhyme in there.
Put in a rhyme for feet after "bouncing toward your body"
Make sure you maintain the rhythm when you read it aloud. If you're not sure, tomorrow I can show you the rhythm you've built up in your poem.
Clumsy is a jittery
Junebug jumping
Into your feet
It makes you shake ~ and ~
Fall like a EARTHQUAKE...
It tangles, twisting you feet
Clumsy is a zany ball
Bouncing towards you heart beat...
So...Watch out!!!
How about this Mr.Byrd??????
Amazing! That is a good example of how rhyme can be used without getting too cutesy or ridiculous.
I like it - you might want to think about how the rhythm stops suddenly at the end. Maybe that's what you want. At this point, it's about personal preference.
I think could extend it sometime - connect it to deep meaning. Why are you writing about clumsiness? It's up to you!
Sadness is a deep pool druning your heart.
Hi Sarita...Well mr.byrd i am writing about clumsiness because i am kind of clumsy....
I figured. Does it bother you? What does the word graceful mean to you? These are questions you can explore when adding to your poem. I am only pushing you to think deeply about your writing. Sometimes a person needs to take a break from a piece of writing and come back with fresh eyes. Just some tips!
Sarita! That IS sad! Good work!
Don't forget to see my new posting. Why would you write a poem with a line about sadness? Well, everyone feels that way once in a while. It is a strong emotion and good to write about it.
Good luck!
No it doesn't bother me, but ake a lot of messes...
The word GRACEFUL TO ME MEANS THIS:
Graceful is an adhesive book bringing peace back into your heart and soul or back into the world.
christine r said....
love is a seed sprouting into a beautiful rose that turns a rainy day into a day of paradise
death is a painful shot that stays in your body forever
love is joy full person sailing all the way to your heart
Lovepreet!!! You really need to stop copying what i write... You did it today and school and you copied my metaphor....Please don't do that... Try to be smart and make your own.. ok?
read the poemi wrote on the feelings page when you get a chance to LOVEPREET!!!!!!!
read the poemi wrote on the feelings page when you get a chance to LOVEPREET!!!!!!!
oh!oh! I have one...
love is the key to happyness
isn't that great
I know i'm great
christine r said....
anastasia, i totally agree. Lovepreet should stop copying you. plus, he spelled joyful wrong. LOVEPREET, MAKE UP YOUR OWN METAPHORS. OMG!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
hey thanks for backing me up Christine....Even through your writing you sound like you do when you are seaking and i love that!
ROCK ON!!!!!!!
christine r said...
no prob ana.:)
whats up christine? whatcha doing?
friendship is bowl of strawberries waiting for you to eat them. Some are sweet moments.Some are sour moments.
anna lovepreet copied your metaphor.........he is such a copy catter
yea i know Pardeep i already told them.....
really
yea read more at the top
wow! pardeep that is really good
Good job, Pardeep! You should post more!
A rainy day is a monster that keeps away bright sunny days from happening.
christine r said....
rock on jessy. luv the metaphor. by the way, happy B day!!!!!!!!!!:)
anger is a vilont gang fight hapening everywhere
Love the metaphor Mahomudur.
By the way Christine April,12 is not my b-day. You must of got confused with the other Jessica!!:)
Annoyance is a little person nagging in your mind...
Sadness is a rose ripped up into a million pieces and thrown deep into the cold and dark ocean.
daisy that is a vey nice metaphor on sadness. i have never thought of that.
Daisy - really great metaphor!!!
A disaster is the empire state callapsing and crushing hundreds of people!!
A blazing, star is
like a huge manshion,
house with no roof in the,
middle of Florida,
with a burning ,
dieing man,
inside of it
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